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| By: ,CARCRASH | Date: November 3, 2009, 5:33 pm |
So was this like a poem or a story or like what?
You should really break it into paragraphs or some shit. =/ |
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| By: ToxicPixieDust* | Date: November 3, 2009, 7:26 pm |
,CARCRASH
It was Creative Writing. |
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| By: MeTal*Alain | Date: November 4, 2009, 12:29 am |
The feel of the raindrops against my bare skins makes you feel so alive
There`s a agreement mistake there. Are you talking you or me? It's pretty good. Probably could do with some different spacing though |
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| By: victoriaclarke, | Date: November 4, 2009, 8:51 am | how the fuck is this a poem? | |
| By: LAUGH;cry | Date: November 4, 2009, 8:59 pm | I've read poems written like this.. it could be a poem. | |
| By: Beckyy7 | Date: November 5, 2009, 4:26 am |
Its good, you should def break it up though so it has more of a structure instead of just a wall of text. It makes it much more visually appealing, and doesnt make people feel like they're going to be reading an essay. 
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| By: xWHOREmoans. | Date: November 5, 2009, 9:24 am |
MeTal*Alain
It was originally about the writer, I changed it last minute and didn't catch it. |
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| By: SMP,Sam | Date: November 5, 2009, 3:54 pm | I agree with other comments here, in needs more structure. The concept it great though, it intrigued me. | |
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